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The bar chart provides information about how often people in the USA spent ate fast food from 2003 to 2013

The bar chart provides information about how often people in the USA spent ate fast food from 2003 to 2013
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The bar chart illustrates the consumption of fast
food
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 in the USA between 2003 and 2013.
Overall
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, many
people
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 visited a fast
food
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 restaurant at least once a week or one or two
times
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 a month. Despite that, in most cases, figures were reduced throughout the period.
To begin
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, the
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people
Correct quantifier usage
number of people
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 who ate junk
food
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 every day are less than 5% each year and figures
reduced
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were reduced
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 in 2013 compared to 2003.
However
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,
people
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 who ate junk items once a week and several
times
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 a week show a similar pattern that increased from 2003 to 2006 and reduced in 2013.
Furthermore
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, the highest percentage of approximately 32% was recorded in weekly consumers in 2006, which is equal to
people
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 who ate at
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a restaurant
the restaurant
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restaurant
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restaurants
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 in 2013 at least once or twice a month. Noticeably, the group who ate fast
food
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 a few
times
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 a year levelled off at 15% in 2006 and 2013.
Also
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, folks who never ate fast
food
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 had equal values of less than 5% in 2006 and 2013.Noticeably, the group who ate fast
food
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 a few
times
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 a year levelled off at 15% in 2006 and 2013.
Also
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, folks who never ate fast
food
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 had equal values of less than 5% in 2006 and 2013.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, people, times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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