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Nowadays, the football supporters behave violently. What is the cause? How can we solve it?

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In
this
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 modern world, it is irrefutable fact that sports athletes players especially footballers
Fans
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 are doing activities which are harmful not only to them but sometimes audions
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 harmful in different ways
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 as injuries. I will discuss some of the reasons
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 the solution to
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 problem in a
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 essay.
To begin
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 with,
while
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 playing football
games
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 players have to do the hardest struggle to do a single goal and if they failed to do so
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 supporters became frustrated and do some violent activities like a kick on the flag.
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, one research conducted by The Times of India found that 70% of
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 are doing unfair activities
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 their supporting
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team
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 not able to win those matches.
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, every game has two teams and two fan bases so when one
team
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 won the game the opposition
fans
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 attack the ruler
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.
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, to look at the solution to
this
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 problem the government and the crowd both have to maintain an understanding of the
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 and support their
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. It might be difficult for people to seat calmly
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 watching football
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 so authorities must have to appoint some more security guards and do surveillance not only in the stadium but
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 watch local areas where people bet on particular
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. In conclusion, we all know that football is a very fast-moving game so
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 are active to watch
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. If authorities look into
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 matter and at a certain point individuals support laws and make understanding between each other
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 we can resolve
this
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 problem easily.
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