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Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. SOme people argue the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

#millions #dollars #space #research #year #people #money #standards #earth
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 of people in Glasgow having three levels of education namely : (
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 , school and no
qualifications
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2010. There is information about five groups in the bar
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overall
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most numbers of
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graduated
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university
 are in younger groups ;
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qualifications
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 really close to each other except a little
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between
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 the amount of education.
According to
 the
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 , there is 76% of people which is the highest
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having
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university
 degrees between the age of (24-35) ; and
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(16-24) and (35-50) were the same
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the
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number
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71% , and two others were 50% about
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this
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 9% and rising to 72% in the oldest
ages
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 around 15% and 20% in younger
ages
 , except the lowest
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 which is 3% in over 75s .
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 of men and women having school certifications ;
furthermore
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 there is a little
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 in the numbers of
university
 degrees and no
qualifications
 in 3% which
in
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 given on the
pie
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • scientific discoveries
  • cutting-edge technology
  • pioneering research
  • socio-economic development
  • improved healthcare
  • education
  • poverty alleviation
  • infrastructure
  • balanced approach
  • cost-effective
  • prioritize
  • allocate
  • resources
  • budget
  • investment
  • sustainable development
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