Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. Do you agree or disagree ?

Recently,the football World Cup has aroused
people
’s widespread attention attracting many tourists from
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world.Some
people
suggest
the
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international sporting
occasions
are good opportunities for
people
to ease international tensions and release patriotic emotions.In
this
essay,I will argue why I agree with it. One of the
reason
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that international sporting
occasions
are essential is that the sports
does
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not have
the
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national boundary because
athletes
from every country can participate in the match and they can gain
people
’s respect
by
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their efforts,which motivates thousands of
people
in the world.There are many spirits that we can learn from athletic matches like cooperation which is essential in football
match
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and respect for each other among
athletes
from different countries
although
they all want to
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.
The international
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sports
occasions
give us an opportunity to eliminate
foreigners’
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stereotype
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and communicate with each other. In international sporting matches,
athletes
represent not only themselves but
also
their country.For some
athletes
,it is their patriotic emotion that supports them to endure hard training,which can greatly motivate the audience’s
emotion
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emotions
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and tell them the importance of patriotism.Actually,more and more
people
have been affected by them and contribute themselves in their field for the thriving prosperity of their country.Compared with the past,we do not need blood and sacrifice to play an educational role.
To
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conclusion,my view is that
the
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international sporting
occasions
can improve our understanding of other countries and set up a good model role who can release patriotic emotions in a safe way.
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