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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in town and cities closing

#growth #shops #town #cities
With the enlargement of online ,shopping it is predicted that
one
 day it will lead to the closure of all shops in towns and cities .I totally agree because these days people depend on buying their things online since it's much cheaper than going to the shop
also
 there is an unlimited variety of options from all shops around the world . Online shopping is much cheaper . With
one
 click the person can buy more than 10
items
 and it will be cheaper than
one
 item in the regular stores .
For example
 in saudi arabia shein is a popular website because it is very cheap and it has regular discount codes which will lower the prices even more and many similar outfits from the ones in popular stores are available there at a much lower price. A variety of unlimited options are available in online shopping .People can shop from any store around the world and that makes them prefer online shopping since there are unlimited
items
 to buy , For ,example many old video games are not available in saudi arabia
thus
this
 would make people buy them from online websites since it's the only option .
Overall
, I believe that online shopping could lead to the closure of all shops
due to
 the cheap prices and the unlimited
items
 available.
One
 great suggestion would be that stores should make discounts every month and try to bring rare
items
 by doing that the shop will attract many new costumers and
also
 secure their old costumes.
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