Worker often have to retire at the age of 60 or 65. However, some people say that they should be allowed to continue working for as long as they want. What is your opinion about this?

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obligation
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for
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most
people
to retire in their 60s,
however
, some
people
think that there should not be restrictions regarding
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in
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workers. I agree that person should be able to
chose
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when she wants to retire.
The most
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of
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people
start to work in their 20s and get retirement after circa 40 years of active work. For some of
them
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this
is the best period in their lives
,
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when they can rest, enjoy their free time,
hobbies
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and spend a lot of time with their partners, children and grandchildren.
Aging
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can bring some health issues in
people
, so some of them are not physically or
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cognitively
capable to do their jobs anymore, so
this
can
also
be
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reasonable reason for retirement.
On the other hand
, it is very hard to stop doing a job that she was doing for that many years and be forced to change
lifestyle
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her lifestyle
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and daily habits.
This
can be
particulary
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particularly
hard for
people
that were very devoted to their jobs or for those that have no families, especially if they are still physically and mentally capable of doing it. Allowing those
people
to continue to work
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in goverments
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goverments
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governments
government
would contribute to
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the general
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budget, since they would still contribute to taxes, but
also
be able to use
experience
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of these workers since they can continue to contribute to their profession, but
also
to
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transfer their knowledge to younger generations. In conclusion, workers should be able to
chose
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wheater they want to retire after
certain
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age or not if their health status is good
,
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since they can contribute to their professions
greately
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greatly
, but
also
to
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govermental
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governmental
fond.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retirement age
  • pension systems
  • social security
  • life expectancy
  • mental and physical well-being
  • active and engaged
  • mentorship
  • knowledge transfer
  • job opportunities
  • workforce
  • physical strength
  • workplace safety
  • healthcare costs
  • accommodation
  • financial strain
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