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Do you believe that professional athletes make good role models for young people? Support your opinion with reasons and examples from your own knowledge-edge or experience.

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In
this
 advance and contemporary era, the young generation considers iconic players as their idols. In many ways, they follow them and try to become famous like them. It is undeniable that the players have a blast impact on them. From my perspective, I totally agree with it.
Hence
, in the forthcoming paragraph, I will explain in detail.
To begin
 with, athletes are very popular all over the world
as well as
 the public is interested in any type of game. It is the Z-gen, who have the fascination to copy their idol. Football is the most popular game in the world.
Moreover
, the public is crazy about it
as well as
 people who play soccer are the most well-known human. Footballers are not only well-known but
also
 earn plenty of money. On top of that, they lead a very luxurious life and are connected with many charity organizations. when a person notices that their icons are connected with several types of social events, they
also
 gain an interest in doing something for society.
For instance
, we all know Cristiano Ronaldo is one of the top footballers of all time.
On the other hand
, Embappe another iconic game person at the current moment was a crazy fan of Ronaldo when he was only sixteen years old. He hung Cristiano's photos on the wall of his room and had a dream to become like his role model. For that, he worked hard, and
as a result
, now we all know that he is as famed as a favourite person.
In addition
 to
this
, the folk at an early age are greatly inspired by their hero.
To sum up
, It can be said that, an athlete holds the position to change society by inspiring their followers. Individuals should grab the good thing from their mode and by doing hard work, they can be successful as well.
Submitted by Alma Islam on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Dedication
  • Perseverance
  • Work ethic
  • Physical fitness
  • Healthy lifestyle
  • Charitable work
  • Fame
  • Social issues
  • Giving back to the community
  • High-pressure environment
  • Drug abuse
  • Unsportsmanlike conduct
  • Personal development
  • Visibility
  • Platform
  • Conscious influence
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