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Many products that we buy are made in other countries. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion.

#products #countries
Undoubtedly,the trend to import
plethora
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 of things from different nations becomes very popular from
business
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a business
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prospective
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perspective
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 but it has many cons and prons as well which we are going to discuss
with
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in
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 my opinion. To commence with, the positive effect of purchasing goods from outside the nation is that it makes a strong and good
relation
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 between two countries which is very vital for the development . Fair bonding gives security as well to their favourable nation .
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, America has
very
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a very
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 good
relation
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relationship
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 with
china
, because it
import
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imports
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alot
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a lot
 of products from
china
. on
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the other
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other
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another
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 side, dependence on
another nations
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another nation
other nations
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 for products
decrease
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 the job or work opportunities
from
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in
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country
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the country
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.
furthermore
, the need
of
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for
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 goods will be fulfilled by others
then
 the
prodution
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production
 or factory settlement will automatically decrease which
effects
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affects
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 the economy.
For instance
, Canada imports
pletora
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plethora
 of products from
china
 which impact the
emplyment
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employment
 in Canada. In my opinion, Government and people should make
country
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the country
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 strong through
mass
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the mass
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 production of those goods for which they have proper resources or which they can make;
such
 as
china
 is
on
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apply
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number one in
production
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the production
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 of almost everything.
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