Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Working and studying from
home
has become a trend for all ages all around the world
due to
the
decreasing
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in the price of technology. I believe
this
is a positive development
due to
benefits
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the benefits
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its
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it
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brought to daily life.
This
essay will discuss my perspective with detailed analyses. First and foremost, the most advantageous aspect that working from
home
has made is that it created
ideal
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space for each person in working. For most
people
, staying at
home
is more comfortable
then
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going to work,
furthermore
, when staying at
home
people
can still create results as
efficent
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efficient
as going to the company.
For instance
, in some jobs
such
as computer engineer, there is no difference in facilities whether at
home
or work,
people
only need a single computer to do their tasks, so staying at
home
with
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their
comfortable
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zone sometimes can boost their productivity.
Moreover
, when companies let employees work from
home
, they can cut down some
expenditure
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expenditures
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such
as buying new facilities or
reconstruct
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working areas.
In addition
to the above, children
also
benefit from studying online as it can reduce the risk of
road
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accident
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accidents
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. When learning online, kids do not have to travel to school so the chance to get
accident
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is 0%.
Furthermore
, they can save
their
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energy that used to spend
in
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traveling
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to school to use in many other activities which can benefit their development
such
as playing sports or hanging out with
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a friend
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friend
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.
Last
but not least, their parents
also
gain
beneficial
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in finance when they do not need to spend extra fees like
buss
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tickets.
To sum up
, I reiterate that working and studying from
home
do
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wonders for
people
's life.
This
trend
create
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creates
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enormous advantages for
people
when they can do everything in their most comfortable environment,
also
helping them to save some extra cash.
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