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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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In some nations, unpayable
health
 service is a good thing mainly for the poor
people
 who cannot afford more money for all body-related issues. In
this
 topic, I am going to explain why
i
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I
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 agree that government should provide not only schemes for minor problems but
also
 for the major treatment.
Firstly
, in most countries administration provides free
services
 for human welfare that include
health
. but in some nations it is payable and most of the
people
 who are living in rural areas cannot tolerate these high costs for the treatment.
For example
, in Canada they provide unpayable
services
 for both minor and major problems in the name of OHIP and other nationalities
implements
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 schemes like
in
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apply
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India
they
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provide PMASBY.
As well as
, many IT and other working companies bear 70% to 90% of payment on the bases of insurance.
Secondly
,
However
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, the government should not provide special care for various diseases or disorders like the treatment of cancer because it is soo expensive and makes it most unaffordable for local citizens.
For instance
, to fight against these situations administrations should conduct a campaign and make
people
 gain knowledge about untreatable and unaffordable sickness.
To conclude
this
 topic, as
health
 is an important thing in
people
's lives and for the future of the country, the government can offer
health
 care
services
 basics rather than advanced healthcare
services
.
Due to
this
, our nationality can experience a low death rate and sickness rates in the form of various
health
 schemes it can help
the
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poor
people
 to live their life very
easy
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easily
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.
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