The contiuned rise in the worlds population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. what are the causes of this continued rise. do you agre?

Humans are on the earth for at least a million years ago and they are developing
as well as
increasing day by day. The constant rise in population has been noted
from
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last
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50 years. Many
scientiest
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scientist
scientists
have made concerned about
this
situation and stated
this
can be
most
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dangerous
problem
throughout the human era .
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paragraphs, will elaborate on the causes of
this
issue
and in the
last
,
conclusion
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I will provide my view on
this
situation.
Firstly
, growth in the human population can become problematic
to
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every nation's economy. Since
,
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the overdressed country will require more food and other basic amenities that can lead the things in scarcity and
this
can be a big headache for
government
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throughout the world. Inflation in needed things can make
people
less happy so they can be mentally unstable and apprehensive. For these future threats,
people
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careless attitude
for
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proper family planning is can be the major reason
along with
poor
countries
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countries'
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downgraded education.
In addition
to it,
governments
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governments'
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wrong future
predications
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about birth rate per annum must be a point to blame. And
last
but not least,
people
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less
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awareness about the world and its
problem
can
also
be a valid argument for
this
cause. I totally agree with
this
issue
and believe, if
it's not get
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in control quickly it can be a very gigantic
problem
for future generations. I believe to solve
this
issue
, everyone should step forward and
also
the government across the countries should make strict laws
for
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instance,
one-child
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policy. If we do not solve
this
problem
the earth's environment is in
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big danger so do the human lives.
To sum up
,
this
is a
problem
that humans facing in
this
era and
also
the biggest
issue
throughout human history and if it's not solved soon the extinction of
people
is near.
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