Schools are no longer necessary because children can get so much information available through the Internet, and they can study just as well at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, there are many people
think
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who think
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students
don’t need to go
school
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to school
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, they can just stay at
home
to
study
well. There are
also
some parents thinking their
childs
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child
should go to
school
,
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apply
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because in some parent’s
mind
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minds
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,
school
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the school
a school
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can provide better education
resource
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resources
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. In my opinion, I generally agree to go to
school
study
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to study
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. The reason why I think it’s possible to
study
in
school
is that
students
can’t control themselves
wll
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well
will
. Some
students
will play
game
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games
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on the
internet
,
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when they
study
on
internet
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the internet
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. When parents come to check what their
child
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children
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do, the child will change
website
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the website
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to make a feel
is
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like they
study
hard. So you may never know the
students
study
situation and their grades if
study
through the
internet
.
For example
, my sister
study
at
home
recently.
However
, I found that she just sometimes made notes and
then
she could play
game
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games
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with her friends. Not only that
,
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apply
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but
also
I think
study
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studying
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at
home
will influence some poor
students
. Because the poor don’t have enough money to support their
children
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children's
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study
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studies
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on
internet
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the internet
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. Give an example, it’s hard to
life
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live
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for someone. But now, their
childs
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children
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need a phone or pad to
study
. They can’t stand
this
fee so
the
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apply
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poor
students
may lose
the
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their
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education.
However
, there are many people
say
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who say
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that
students
study
at
home
better than
study
at
school
. Because they think if
students
study
at
school
they need to make sure there will be safe when
students
go to
school
. And some parents worry about their
childs
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children
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will be hungry or
feel
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feeling
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cold in
school
. So they prefer to
study
at
home
than
studying
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study
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at
school
. From what
have
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has
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been discussed, we can learn that there are many
advantage
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advantages
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to
study
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studying
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at
school
than
study
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studying
show examples
at
home
. So I generally
agree
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onagree
toagree
withagree
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study
at
home
.
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