Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen? What are the consequences of this situation?

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money to pay for
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need to cultivate their talent in childhood. The expense of extra-curriculum is high,
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cannot pay for it.
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the weekend is for entertainment and rest, so they didn'
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situation led to mortal health. Citizens are in a stressful environment and the work that they hate
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and time-wasting, if
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  • dread
  • passion
  • inherent talent
  • fufilling
  • career
  • job
  • fulfilled
  • unhappy
  • unsatisfied
  • work-life balance
  • burnout
  • stress
  • depression
  • anxiety
  • self-esteem
  • emotional well-being
  • potential
  • achieve
  • success
  • personal growth
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