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This diagram shows how bricks are produced from clay for the building industry. This process is divided in 3 different steps from getting the clay, form it into bricks and letting it dry, heat and cool, then packing and delivering the finished product.

This diagram shows how bricks are produced from clay for the building industry. This process is divided in 3 different steps from getting the clay, form it into bricks and letting it dry, heat and cool, then packing and delivering the finished product.
In the first step, we excavate the raw material with a digger, bringing the clay over a metal grid to get all the big stuff out and from there the material goes with the conveyor belt
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 along, sand and water get mixed with it. The mixture is
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 cut with the wire cutter or put in
molds
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 to form the
bricks
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.
The next step is
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 the drying oven where the
bricks
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 rest for one to two days. After that,
bricks
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 get heated up between 200 and 900 degrees Celsius, followed by high heat with 870-1300 degree Celsius. When the heating process is finished, they will sit in the cool room for up to 3 days. In the
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 step,
bricks
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 get packed on pallets and get moved in the delivery truck to reach the destination, where they are going to the warehouse or to the customer.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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