Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is undeniable that
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modern-day technologies and globalization have profoundly affected the way we make choices, both small and life-long.
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of
people
state that today we have
bigger
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variety of options, whether it is food, accommodation, clothing or
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.
However
, in my opinion,
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range of options cannot guarantee the same amount of choices. In the next
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I shall elaborate
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viewpoint.
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with,
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technological advancement brought numerous amounts of vocations
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job
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market.
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internet access to various sources and data about any type of occupation in any part of the world, young
people
can consider all options before making one of the most important decisions in their life.
Nevertheless
, the rise of inflation and migration crisis force
people
to pursue not the dream profession, but
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one that can provide food, shelter and some status in society for them and their families.
Furthermore
,
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generation has to dwell in a big city in order to start and build a career.
Such
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accommodation makes
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rent
price
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prices
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go higher,
while
the quality of life is still low. To illustrate, in cities like New York tenants live in small apartments with shared bathrooms and
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while
paying spending half of their income. Another point, the illusion of choice is often created as
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way to make
people
waste money and increase
income
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the income
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of big corporations.
For instance
,
it is clear that
fashion
trends change every season. What is
also
well-known, is that every trend is dictated by
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business. After each
fashion
week, the
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with a new dress
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out in our
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feed becoming
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in
fashion
. Buying new clothing
people
believe that they are fashionable,
whereas
in reality is just money down the drain. In conclusion, I agree that nowadays
people
can afford much more than
people
of the past. At the same time, the modern style of life diminishes any choice and dictates a person how
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into society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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