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The two below maps indicates the road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010

The two below maps indicates the road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010
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The two below maps
indicates
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 the
road
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 access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010, in the following paragraphs, we are going to compare the main features between the two maps.
Overall
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, we can notice that both hospital and city roads remain in the same location
while
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the
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significant changes happened in
public
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the public
a public
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 car park,
bus
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station
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 and the roundabout. When it comes to
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Bus
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the Bus
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station
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,
it is clear that
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 it has been added to the left side of
hospital
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the hospital
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road
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 in 2010 as there was no
bus
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station
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 in 2007, but only
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bus
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a bus
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 stop area. In 2010, a roundabout has been established in the place of
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bus
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the bus
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 stop point in 2007.
Furthermore
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, an area for a public car park has been added to the right side of the city hospital.
A two
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Two
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 roundabouts
has
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 been added
in
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to
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 the hospital
road
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 in 2010 linked to the
Bus
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station
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.
Briefly
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,Briefly
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 we can describe that there are a significant number of changes in
the
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road
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 access between 2007 and 2010.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, bus, station with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "indicates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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