Some people think news has no connection to people's lives, so it is a waste of time to read the news in newspapers and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Information of day-to-day events flow in
people
's
life
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thanks to the media. It is argued that news
are
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is
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not as important as some try to tell,
due to
the
dwindle
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link between personal situation and the happening. Despite the
existance
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existence
of futile stories, the majority of them are connected to
mankind
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present and future, providing details that could have the potential of changing lives or
prevent
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some dreadful issues. In my opinion,
human-beings
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knowledge is power,
hence
any news need to be comprehended.
To begin
with, stories broadcasted on
medias
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media
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are plentiful and
releated
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related
to various categories. It depends on
people
to distinguish which are fundamental for their conditions and the ones
sold
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only for the mere
reasons
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reason
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of obtaining followers.
For instance
, gossip can be a pleasuring reading, useful to disconnect from serious matters.
However
, it is not
comperable
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comparable
to the latest update about finance, politic, current history and
environment
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the environment
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. Announcements regarding these topics can have an enormous impact on mankind's life,
such
as losing
capital
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invested
on
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a market that faces a negative trend or a different political faction elected which plans of sustaining small
buisness
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business
owner
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at the
expenses
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expense
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of important firms. Another reason why it is a good habit to learn about news is for personal
enlightment
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enlightenment
.
Although
some events are not strictly related to some human-being condition, perhaps
due to
the geographical situation of the story, is a valuable practice to acknowledge the happening. Not only is
enhanching
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enhancing
people
's culture, but
also
implementing personal growth. In conclusion, even though some
people
believe that it is not worthy to comprehend discovery without
direct
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connection to
theirs
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their
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lives, I strongly disagree
due to
the
benifit
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benefit
benefits
that acknowledging can produce in
everyone
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everyone's
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lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Informed
  • Current events
  • Public awareness
  • Local news
  • Global issues
  • Sensationalism
  • Misinformation
  • Bias
  • Community
  • Public safety
  • Health advisories
  • Market trends
  • Traffic updates
  • Weather forecasts
  • Educate
  • Raise awareness
  • Opinion formation
  • Decision making
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