Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Sharing
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transparently important rather than keep the essential
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. I feel that
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the fact. A commonly held belief is that it is proper to share as much
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as possible, especially in
scientific
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research business and the academic world. they maintain that
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will solve some problems and bring
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a better condition. A very good example here is when we talk about
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, they need to be clear because
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will be used for another function : analysis
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research and long-term education.
furthermore
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, the
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shared
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will build
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public trust and
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boost them to think critically.
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, not only
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researchers
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,
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businessmen
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and academics
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take a big role but
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public society to develop a better world. It is argued
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some people that some
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is too valuable to be shared openly. They argue that if
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accessible by
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group,
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leak estimated will
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.
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citizen identity
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shared freely by
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the government
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, will be used by some illegal
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. if
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case
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again, local people will get difficulty in administration
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related to
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the government
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.
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,
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the end,
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the
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on
private
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need
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to be taken as part of an action.
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, I feel that whoever
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to share
an important
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important information
a piece of important information
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information
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,
they
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need to
looked
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up
about
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the value of the
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and
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take into consideration
about
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the outcome or impact
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of
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shared
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happening.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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