Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visits such places?

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contemporary era,the topic of tourism is always debatable

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areas where conditions are very difficult

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desert or the Antarctic.

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and beauty of nature.

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for tracking and travelling for the pride of their nation as long as only fewer can reach the peak of the mountain and some

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there. Probing ahead,towards the demerits that these advantages are not safe for tourists

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these locations are more expensive.

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but after came back from that place everyone

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fun or thrilling for some

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remain at risk of death at risky locations.

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, every visitor must use caution.

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