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computer education is compulsory at school level. it shouldn't be kids can learn from their daily interaction. do you agree or not

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Dear myself, You are doing a pretty good job of following your goals. You’ve set out your goals and you’ve had certain success in your studies. You’ve known how to take care of yourself. You haven’t taken the first two months of the year for granted.
Although
 I’m really satisfied with the progress, there are still things that I want to “fix” about you. You need to learn how to control your anger, and how to not be distracted by “uncontrollable distractions”.
Although
 you don’t need to go to school the next day, going to bed early is still a routine you have to keep. Sometimes you stay up late, wake up late, and procrastinate your plan. You need to be more disciplined, and stop expecting that you can make progress without training properly. Do not interrupt your routine of sitting at the table every evening to work on your goals. Sometimes your mind gets overloaded with the bad things of
this
 world. It can be the information from the news, and books, to the things that happen around you. just sit back, read a story, forget all about the negativity of
this
 world and focus on the moral, and the details of the story. Let yourself fly a bit to dive into the wonderful world of literature. You have an amazing imagination. You have the skill to talk in front of people. You can draw beautifully. You can dance. Maintain it. Love yourself. Improve your mistakes. Acknowledge your effort every single day.
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