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With the widespread use of interent , more and more peolpe choose to work from home. Do the advantage of this trend outwight the disadvantage?

#interent #peolpe #work #home #advantage #trend #outwight
There is no doubt, nowadays, most
of
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the
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people
 prefer to do work from home
due to
 the increased use of the internet. I think its pros are more than its cons.
To begin
 with
advantages
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 of working from home, first of all in
this
 fast-paced life
people
 have to be more productive in a small span of time which is very difficult as, time is precious ,so,
this
 development saves a lot of time for travelling alongside the wages of travelling. Moving
further
, there are many
people
 who cannot leave their homes because of
some
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family problems ,so,
this
 development proves as a boon for them in these kinds of times. On the other side, it is not necessary to work or productivity is significant for the company and human growth other factors are much needed like face-to-face communication , and interaction with colleagues which are not fully possible on the internet or video calling ,
as a result
,
people
 get lots of losses throughout life. To recapitulate, the internet helps a lot for
people
 in order to do work from home and its benefits are more than its flaws.
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