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With the rise of ebooks comes the decline in paper books. Some people see this as a good forward step while others do not. What are advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Some folks argue about
increase
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the increase
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of
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 electronic
books
 and
decrease
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the decrease
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of
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in
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paper
books
. The
fist
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people
 claim that a good way. An alternative belief regards
this
 as rising of electronic
books
 is
dreadful
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 trend. In
this
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 both points of view are going to be examined and a particular opinion will be provided. On the one hand, we are living in
the
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 technological era and technology is coming. Ebooks might save a lot of trees on our globe.
Moreover
, Ebooks have internet access and we easily could download a lot of
books
 on our devices.
In addition
, readers who use Ebook have a tremendous quantity of language, they do not need to wait a long term to download new languages
due to
 contemporary technology.
Nonetheless
, Electronic
books
 have a bunch of
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 and it can annoy.
On the other hand
,
people
 who read the
paper
 book might have a problem with their health
such
 as vision
problem
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problems
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. Because
people
 usually read
books
 at night time with low light. Low light has a harmful impact on our vision.
Additionally
,
paper
books
 are produced
of
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 trees and deforestation has a harmful influence on our environment.
Nonetheless
, my dad used to read
paper
books
 he has a tremendous collection of old
books
 and he told me that
paper
 book does not need to charge and we always can read
it
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 independently where we are.
To sum up
, I reckon
this
 was have more advantages than disadvantages. If
people
 use more Ebooks, we will save more trees.
Otherwise
, it could wipe out our green environment.
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