Most modern families have both parents working as a result children spend less and less time with their parents. What is the reason for this? What problems can this cause?

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In the 21st century, human life became more complex and
compitative
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competitive
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parents
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spend less amount of
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with their
children
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analysis of the reasons and the problems generating
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issue. To start with, there are various reasons behind the busy
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of
parents
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, the growing number of industries
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enormous battle for profit making.
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,now employees
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excessive workload that reduces their leisure
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with the family.
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the American psychological association research study on mental health problems among IT professionals (2021) results that 82% of US technical professionals are spending weekly less than 10 hours with their
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, it makes their family disorganized and higher
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of anonymity among members.
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, multimillion companies and their employers now
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a hidden agenda
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as long working hours with less
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break
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and the maximum utilization of their day-
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for money making.
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, these business policies clearly change the principles of parenthood.
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,
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a parting
parents
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from their
children
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brings various mental and developmental changes among minors.
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, it can
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to depression and anxiety among
children
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especially those who have kids below 7 years of age .
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, mental stress
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developmental and health issues
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adults don't get more
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to
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reconcile
. Nowadays,
children
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likes
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to eat food from outside
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from fast food restaurant that
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by elders because they don't have any
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to cook for their family.
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may cause obesity and many health-related
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among
children
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, having a healthy family relationship is a blessing
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in
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nuclear family.
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,
parents
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should keep a balanced life between personal and professional goals for making their future generation
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attain a successful life.
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