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Some people believe that bicycles are the best mode of transport in the cities, while others disagree. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both views and give your opinion.

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Some
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 conflicting opinions
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 whether bikes are the best means of
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urban areas. In my opinion, its drawbacks are more remarkable than the positive
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in
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and reasons
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 to examples will be given in
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 essay. On the one hand, riding a bike in the cities has different demerits.
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, travelling in a metropolis between places, which requires
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 for a great
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, will take more time and effort than any other
types
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 of
transport
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.
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, Ho Chi Minh City, which is the largest metropolis
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 Vietnam, is so large
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 to traffic congestion and lack of safe parking plots.
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,
bicycles
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 are not the best
types
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 of
transport
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 there. Another reason, which is addressed from the aforementioned disadvantage, is the lack of safety in the city. In fact, after cycling for a long
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 and after that if the biker wants to take a short break, they will
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 have to keep their bike safe. In comparison to motorcycles, which are the most popular means of
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 in Vietnam, they are less safe because it is not provided with a lock.
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, despite being disadvantageous, I believe that its merits are more remarkably considerable.
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, riding
bicycles
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, when
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compares
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 to other means of
transport
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such
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 as cars or motorbikes,
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results
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 in a more eco-friendly
atmostphere
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atmosphere
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metropolitan areas.
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European cities are typical instances of
contribution
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the contribution
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 of
bicycles
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engages
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to the reduction of greenhouse
emission
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emissions
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, which increases the cleanliness of the air, improving the denizens' condition.
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, not only is cycling helping the ecosystem, but
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 improving the residents' physical health. In fact, riding a bike is a vigorous activity
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 to jogging, swimming or hiking because the bikers can ride for a longer
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 than jogging and hiking and
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 boring than swimming when it is
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 of scenery.
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, as aforementioned, it does improve the bikers’ fitness, especially cardiovascular and
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skeletal
 health. In conclusion, it is apparent that
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bicycles
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 are the greatest
transport
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 in the cities for these major reasons:
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environmentally
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 friendly and increase fitness whilst having inconsiderable
downside
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downsides
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,
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bad
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 for
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long-distance
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distance
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 travel and
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 higher protection from
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criminals
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 than other vehicles.
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task response
Work on addressing the advantages and disadvantages of both views more comprehensively.
coherence cohesion
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lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary and use appropriate collocations to enhance the lexical quality of your essay.
grammatical range
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Zero Emissions
  • Cardiovascular Exercise
  • Cost-Effective
  • Traffic Congestion
  • Green Environment
  • Vulnerable to Accidents
  • Insufficient Bike Lanes
  • Weather Conditions
  • Urban Areas
  • Practicality
  • Infrastructure
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