You recently received a letter from a friend asking for your advice on whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/ she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: say why she will not enjoy going to college explain why getting a job is a good idea Suggest the type of job that would be suitable.
Dear Robin,
I'm writing to let you know how excited I am that you are going to be able to work, now that you have graduated in commerce. I know you have the choice of studying
further
, but I would advise you to pick up a job in finance as a career.
I don't think you'll really like going to college because there are hardly any practical courses in local colleges and I know that you are easily bored with theoretical subjects.
Instead
, if you start working as an accountant, you will gain experience that will help you to study a better course abroad, where your work experience will be an advantage to you. Additionally
, it will add value to your application to study in a foreign university.
As I said earlier, jobs related to accountancy, financial analysis, share brokerage, and equity market analysis would be highly suitable for you. Other than being paid well, they will also
make you an expert in understanding the utilisation of finances in companies.
I hope will consider my suggestions seriously and let me know about your decision so that I can help you further
.
Yours
MatthewSubmitted by Leena Kapoor on
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coherence cohesion
Ensure every paragraph has a clear purpose. Your letter does well in this aspect, keeping each paragraph focused on a single idea, such as explaining your advice, discussing the negatives of going to college, and suggesting job options. This approach enhances the coherence of your letter.
task achievement
You might want to provide more detailed examples or reasons behind your suggestions, especially in the section discussing why college wouldn't be enjoyable. Adding specific examples or elaborating on alternatives could enhance your task response score.
logical structure
Your letter is well-structured, featuring a logical flow of ideas from one paragraph to the next. This makes your argument convincing and your advice clear.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing of your letter are appropriately formal, fitting the context of giving advice to a friend. This maintains a suitable tone throughout.
complete response
You successfully addressed the task by advising against college and suggesting a job, specifying which field and why it's beneficial. This clarity in task response is commendable.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,