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many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course of university education. to what extent do you agree or disagree

#people #guarantee #job #course #university #education
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 of people think that the only
way
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graduation
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university can ensure
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 great career life in the future.
However
, I would argue that it is justifiable to say that it has many
way
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 to get
a good jobs
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a good job
good jobs
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such
 as other
experience
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experiences
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 and really disagree with the
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 of
this
 topic.
Firstly
, it seemly true in some part that good education can
prepared
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 their students to take a ready before get their work in the future,
for example
, college level will teach a basic of knowledge related to their
choosen
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chosen
 career path.
Moreover
, they can provide
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advance
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 level of practice with adaptation in some
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 to match
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industrial demand seemly
a short cuts
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 of
the
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work
experiences
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experience
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 with study only 3 or 4 years of learning.
On the other hand
, other experiences with not a subject can provide
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important skills to encourage
thier
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their
 path in the same
way
.
To
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 instance, presentation or team collaboration
skill
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skills
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 can
earned
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 from
take
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 a competition
such
 as
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a business
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 challenge.
As well as
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another activity
other activities
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activities
 in university
such
boardway
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 club can support
thier
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their
 self-confidence or communication
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performance
. For those of any
skill
 with they can
earned
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be earned
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 from any
activities
 can support
thier
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their
 profile when they want to interview
in
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 the first companies in
thier
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their
 life because
of
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a soft
skill
 cannot teach only in class but
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need
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 to take more time to practice and
also
 they don't have any real work experience. The interviewer can review their abilities from
activities
 and any personal task.
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 conclusion is not only a course in education can provide a good
way
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their
 working life but need any
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which
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 can get from
activities
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also
encorage
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encourage
 them too.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • guarantee a good job
  • university education
  • in-depth knowledge
  • specialized skills
  • professional fields
  • vocational training
  • apprenticeships
  • high-paying
  • fulfilling jobs
  • trades
  • self-taught skills
  • expertise
  • success
  • entrepreneurs
  • practical experience
  • personal drive
  • financial burden
  • tuition fees
  • student loans
  • alternative pathways
  • job market
  • valuing skills
  • formal education
  • hands-on ability
  • academic qualifications
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