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Many governments are investing less in roads and more in public transport systems. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#governments #roads #transport #systems
The
way
 of
transportation
 these days really matters, many important places in daily
live
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 are far
form
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from
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 each other and you need a fast
way
 to get
their
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there
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 faster in order to finish your daily requirements. In my
opinion
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 the pros of
puplic
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public
transportation
is
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 much greater than the cons
Firstly
, today's tasks need
fast
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way
 to accomplish;
for instance
, college students need to get to
the
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school and
then
 to the
part
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time
 work place
then
 to the gym,
this
 will not be possible without
fast
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way
 of
transportation
.
Therefore
,
government's
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 has to provide public ways to deliver
large
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quantity
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 of
people
 in
fewer
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time
. Buses and trains
helps
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 to reduce the amount of traffic,
road
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 accident, it is
also
 cheap and can serve all the community
people
,
weather
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 young or old and even those with special needs.
However
, personal
vehicle's
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vehicles
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 like cars or bikes
,
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 can help the
people
 who have money to buy these things and those with good health in order to use
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 but it still has some unpleasant
effect
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 on the like traffic
accednt
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accident
accidents
. There are some drawbacks
for
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public
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 pattern
such
 as, it just
take
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 you to fixed places and you can't choose where to go, it has
special
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time
 so you can't control when to come and when to go.
To conclude
, I think the positive impact of public means of
transportation
 is much more than the negative.
Therefore
, focusing on
new
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way
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ways
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 to transport
people
 safer and
sometime
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time saving
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 is
cruisal
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crucial
critical
. On top of that, public
pattern
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 serve all of the community especially
the
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disable
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people
 and
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provide
provid
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provide
 them
better
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a better
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 quality of life
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