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Many governments are investing less in roads and more in public transport systems. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#governments #roads #transport #systems
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The
way
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 of
transportation
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 these days really matters, many important places in daily
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 are far
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from
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 each other and you need a fast
way
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 to get
their
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there
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 faster in order to finish your daily requirements. In my
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 the pros of
puplic
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public
transportation
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is
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 much greater than the cons
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, today's tasks need
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way
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 to accomplish;
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, college students need to get to
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school and
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 to the
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time
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 to the gym,
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 will not be possible without
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way
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 of
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.
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,
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 has to provide public ways to deliver
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quantity
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 of
people
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 in
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time
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. Buses and trains
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 to reduce the amount of traffic,
road
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 accident, it is
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 cheap and can serve all the community
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,
weather
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 young or old and even those with special needs.
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, personal
vehicle's
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 like cars or bikes
,
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 can help the
people
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 who have money to buy these things and those with good health in order to use
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 but it still has some unpleasant
effect
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 on the like traffic
accednt
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accident
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. There are some drawbacks
for
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public
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 pattern
such
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 as, it just
take
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 you to fixed places and you can't choose where to go, it has
special
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time
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 so you can't control when to come and when to go.
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, I think the positive impact of public means of
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 is much more than the negative.
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, focusing on
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way
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 to transport
people
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 safer and
sometime
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sometimes
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time saving
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 is
cruisal
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crucial
critical
. On top of that, public
pattern
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 serve all of the community especially
the
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disable
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people
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 and
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provide
provid
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provide
 them
better
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a better
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 quality of life
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