Teachers are not as imortant as they used to be because of the choice of other alternatives for students,such as online teching.To what extent do yo agree of disagree?

In modern society,
trend
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of virtual learning is inclined.
Although
there are a few advantages to modern teaching
methods
, I strongly believe that teachers are still relevant in the learning process. With
technology
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revolution in
education
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the education
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sector,
students
got multiple options in choosing their own method of learning,
for example
, online
trainings
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training
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, interactive sessions etc. These
methods
enables
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students
to participate in
classes
when ever
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whenever
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they intend to
do
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, which
also
extended learning opportunities to working people, as they are allowed to join
classes
from any place and at any time. These
computer based
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trainings
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training
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provides
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access to their widely available documents or other resources.
However
, there are some drawbacks
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these modern teaching
methods
,
Firstly
, youth focus get
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very easily as it is too much flexible.
Secondly
, During covid pandemic
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many educational institutions introduced online
classes
for kids as well, which
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badly on
kids
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eyes
due to
their increased screen time.
Thirdly
,
virtual
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the virtual
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instructor
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can not focus on any one particular student, so there will
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personal care which is very much required for
few
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a few
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students
.
For instance
,
study
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a study
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conducted by the UK government reveals that education quality declined with virtual
classes
. I strongly believe that teachers cannot be replaced with any of these virtual teaching
methods
. Even today,
class room
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teaching
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best
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the best
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results. Because
,
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it is more effective in delivering lectures and
also
focusing on
students
.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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