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The advantages brought by the spread of English as “a global language” will outweigh the disadvantages. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

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The line graph provides information about the number of shops which closed and opened during the period from 2011 to 2018. Generally speaking, it is obvious that the figures for both items drop dramatically during the period.
To begin
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although
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 there were approximately 8500 new shops in 2011, it decreased considerably to merely 4000 in the new year.
However
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, the number of stores which were opening grew moderately to roughly 6000 and
then
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 dropped dramatically to 4000 in 2015.
Moreover
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, the statistic remained the same and
then
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 decreased to 3000 in 2018. With regard to the closed shops , there was a slight decrease between 2011 and 2012, from approximately 6400 to roughly 6000.
Furthermore
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, the figure rose slightly to about 6500 in 2014.
Nonetheless
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, there was a dramatic drop to almost 900 and
then
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 bounced back to roughly 5000 in 2016. Meanwhile, it kept stable for the rest of the two years.

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