People shopping depend more on age group they belong to than other factors to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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many

people

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believe that shopping directly depends on age group rather than other things like monthly budget, saving etc. In general, lots of new generation follows the recent trend and spend a huge amount of

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on clothing.

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, I completely agree with the fact that it is not valuable for the future to follow shopping trends. First and foremost, every young

people

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whether he or she always prefers to look beautiful and would like to buy new arrival outfits and shoes from a top brand.

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people

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take loans from banks to maintain their high standard of living to gain respect in society rather than simplicity.

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, one of my friends almost wasted 60% income on shopping without any reason.

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, he was just able to use clothes two to three times and

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wasted them in the garbage.

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excessive shopping, now he was in debt and has to pay a big amount of loan to his company.

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, several mature

people

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suggest that the need for shopping depends on individual choice

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of following other factors. Most

people

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argue that focusing on new clothes and expensive brands like Nike, Addidas and many more brands gives nothing to the person

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they lose lots of

money

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on them without any particular circumstances.

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, my one of co-workers in a company always purchases used clothes and does less shopping and invests more

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in his future like investing in stocks, ETFs etc.

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, we will be more financially independent and free from their home expenses.

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, the age group is one of the major factors that heavily rely on shopping, spending more

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on arrival products.

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such

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investment of

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in them does not provide meaningful things in future.

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