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Some people prefer to work on school projects with a group, while others would rather work alone. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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of
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 the
workloads
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 in an assignment, each
students
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student
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 have special
personalities
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personality
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, let alone when it comes to
ones
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those
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 who have
mental
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a mental
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 health
problem
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,
such
 as ADHD and Bipolar disorder.
Therefore
 a few people have their own preference to
work
 as a team
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 a school project and the other
students
 prefer to
work
 alone.  From my point of view, both options have each
drawbacks
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 and conditions. In
this
 essay, I will examine what kind of projects will be best suited as teamwork or
individual
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an individual
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one
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apply
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. First of all, normal individuals might not find any difficulties in choosing whether group teaming or
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 their own
for
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a
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homework.
Nonetheless
, freshmen who have special treatment do not need peers to
work
 with. A good illustration of
this
 is if someone with ADHD
do
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 his or her assignment, it would be challenging if he or she should have a group because of her or his inability to have a good relationship with others.
Conversely
, some others are better
doing
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 their
work
 with classmates.
For instance
, individuals with Bipolar disorder could not manage to finish
the
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 study which needs a large amount of routine since they tend to get bored often.
This
 can
resulted
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 in lower grades.   To summarize,
students
' preference
in
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 working in a group or alone depends on both workloads and personalities, mainly if someone has
mental
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a mental
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 disorder.
Hence
, there is no silver bullet in choosing
among
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 both sides. With the rise of technology in
education
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 system,
hopefully
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students
 can do their homework with personalized methods.
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Stick to this essay structure:

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  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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