IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

Some people agree with spending lots money on a large wedding, while other think a small wedding is a better option. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #lots #money #option
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
In
this
Linking Words
 contemporary epoch,
number
Correct article usage
a number
show examples
if
Correct your spelling
of
show examples
individual
Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
show examples
 concur with spending
high
Correct article usage
a high
show examples
 range of
money
Use synonyms
 on
a big
Correct the article-noun agreement
a big marriage
big marriages
show examples
marriages
Use synonyms
.Whiles other reject
this
Linking Words
 notion that some people believe in
spend
Change the verb form
spending
show examples
 less bill
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
 a wedding ceremony is
great
Change the article
a great
show examples
deal
Add the particle
to deal
show examples
.
However
Linking Words
,I
satisfied
Add a missing verb
am satisfied
show examples
 with
latter
Add an article
the latter
show examples
 view.
This
Linking Words
 essay will discuss
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
both mentioned phenomenon in the upcoming paragraph. There
are
Change the verb form
is
show examples
 adequate evidence which
are
Change the verb form
is
show examples
 substantial first and the foremost reason is that nowadays
expand
Wrong verb form
expanding
show examples
 cash on ceremonial is going to be
trend
Add an article
a trend
the trend
show examples
.
Therefore
Linking Words
,so many masses will spend
money
Use synonyms
 on
marriages
Use synonyms
for
Change preposition
to
show examples
get
Change the verb form
getting
show examples
 fame and make the day memorable.Adding more to it different people have different choices of
weddings
Use synonyms
such
Linking Words
 as some individual like to celebrate traditional ceremony and some are like to do
causual
Correct your spelling
casual
 ceremony and they spend more and
nore
Correct your spelling
more
 cash on it.
Additionally
Linking Words
 on the celebration of marriage individuals
most
Add a missing verb
are most
show examples
 likely to spend the bill on catering,decorations,music systems
as well as
Linking Words
 the rental of big resorts. Probing ahead who oppose
this
Linking Words
 notion that some
crowd's believe
Change the verb form
crowd believes
show examples
 in simple marriage like they like to do
weddings
Use synonyms
 in
temple
Add an article
the temple
a temple
show examples
 or some religious places like church and gurudwara.
Linking Words
Moreover
Add a comma
,Moreover
show examples
whoes
Correct your spelling
whose
who's
 people
do
Correct pronoun usage
who do
show examples
 not have
budget
Add an article
a budget
the budget
show examples
 to celebrate
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
large
marriages
Use synonyms
they
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
are happy to recognise small
weddings
Use synonyms
.
Linking Words
Nevertheless
Add a comma
,Nevertheless
show examples
 some individuals are not preferred to show off they usually honour the wedding at their house they invite their family members.
Initiallyp
Correct your spelling
Initially
 perform  simple
weddings
Use synonyms
 can
safe
Replace the word
save
show examples
money
Use synonyms
 and avoid
to waste
Change the verb form
wasting
show examples
 food
as well as
Linking Words
 they can invest
at
Change preposition
in
show examples
 some good business so in the future they can earn and settle themselves.
To conclude
Linking Words
,Well
according to
Linking Words
 my opinion big
marriages
Use synonyms
 is a waste of
money
Use synonyms
.
However
Linking Words
,simple ceremonies are better for
Add an article
the individual
an individual
show examples
individual
Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
show examples
.
Submitted by sharma1997.rahulthakur on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • extravagant
  • nuptials
  • budget-friendly
  • intimate
  • ceremony
  • celebration
  • status symbol
  • investment
  • logistical challenges
  • future needs
  • destination wedding
  • eco-friendly
  • social gathering
  • memorable occasion
  • allocate funds
What to do next:
Look at other essays: