Some people think that sports involving violence, such as boxing and martial art, should be banned from TV as well as from international competitions. To what extent do you agree?

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Many people believe that sports containing violence,

for

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example

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boxing and

martrial

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martial

material

art should be banned from national television

along with

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international

championship

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championships

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due to

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the imoral

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imoral

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immoral

scene.

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, In my opinion,

while

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I admit that

such

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sports are very entertaining to

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sociaty

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society

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a demaging

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demaging

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damaging

effect on children.

Sport

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such

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as boxing and martial art has become successful business nowadays. There are so many people that pay to see their performance.

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, there is no limited age

that

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allowed to watch

this

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show.

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Also

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the talented player can be a celebrity and become very famous.

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, WWE which is

othe

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the

World Wrestling Entertainment

that

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show

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people

fight

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fighting

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brutaly

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brutally

. Even though

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the performance

are

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mnot

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not

completely real, it will be dangerous for kids when

their

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try

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at home.

Ones

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the children

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apply

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had

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admire

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apply

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their

superstar

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, they will always follow them. There are some harmful roles that they played

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that game

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apply

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apply

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their

punch

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each

others

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faces and

smackdown

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smackdowns

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or even worst.

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, Kids who see

this

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will

copied

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it and somehow when they get angry with their friends they tend to release their

emotion

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through some movement which can harm others.

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although

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sports entertainment

such

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as boxing and martial arts were

ment

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meant

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for

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entertaining

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entertainment

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purposes, their technique can be a motivation for someone to fight especially for children.

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the

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television must be

thoughfful

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thoughtful

to choose what program that relevant before they play it and they should exclusively

limited

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limit

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their

audiances

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audience

age.

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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253 words

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