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In Some Counties, fast-food restaurants and supermarkets give money to schools to promote their Products. Do you think this is Positive or negative development

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Nowadays, many schools are getting money from fast-
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 companies to promote their dishes, which I think can create a lot of negative issues.
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 essay will discuss its positives and negatives.
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 with the cons of fast
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 in schools. First of all, restaurant
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 is always made with the use of refined oil which has lots of flaws for the human body as it is very difficult to digest ,
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,
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 get to suffer from different kinds of diseases and sometimes they get to die.
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, pizza which is part of fast-
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 dishes contains 60% oil which affects the heartbeat and most of the time
children
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 suffer from heart attacks.
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, in starting years off,childhood
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 have more need to eat multi-nutrient
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 items, because of the growth of the body and
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 is always seen that fast
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 does not contain it,
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 their growth gets stopped. On the other side, in
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 competitive ,era
children
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 have to do hard work to improve their horizons of knowledge so these advertisements are a great source of knowledge which gives a chance to them to grow their knowledge of daily use products and can buy independently without any problem. Apart from it, the sale of
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 product help to country and
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 indirectly by increasing income. To recapitulate,
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 the promotion of products boosts the economy of a nation which creates a source of education for
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, I believe that
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 development effect negatively on the growth of the student.
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