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Many parents these days work in other countries and they take their families with them to live their Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

Nowadays, many
people
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 are working in other
countries
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 and
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 that, they take their families and migrate to that
countries
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.
Although
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 it might have a few
disadvantages
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, I do think that the advantages outweigh the
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, which will be discussed in the forthcoming paragraphs.
Firstly
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, there will be advantages for the
nation
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. The population will downturn and
hence
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 unemployment, inflation, pollution, and
such
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 problems will decrease.
For instance
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, if two families from one society will move to other
countries
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, their jobs will be given to others, and their part of government relaxations will be given to others, so it will benefit the
nation
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 directly or indirectly.
Secondly
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, earning in other
countries
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 and spending that money in their own country will directly contribute to the GDP (Gross Domestic Product) of the
nation
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.
On the other hand
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, there are a few
disadvantages
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 which can’t be ignored. The talent of
people
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 will be lost by the
nation
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. In simple terms, the
people
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 who are literate and was serving the
nation
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 will contribute to the development of other nations.
As a result
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, it might directly affect the development of a
nation
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.
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, if an experienced UI/UX designer working in a firm flies to another country, it will take more resources to employ and teach another person.
Moreover
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, the taxes that were paid by those families will decrease, and the expenditure contributing to the economy will be gone.
To conclude
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, there are surely
disadvantages
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 of
people
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 migrating to other nations, but I believe it will decrease the country’s biggest problems like unemployment, inflation, and so on.

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