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The table shows the number of product and their average prices in a well known clothing store

The table shows the number of product and their average prices in a well known clothing store
The table compares the price
on
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 different
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men
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men's
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 and
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women
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women's
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 commodities in a
well known
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well-known
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 shop.
It is clear that
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on
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majority
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the majority
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products
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of products
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women
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pays
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 a
significant
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significantly
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 more than
men
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, except
on
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 underwear. It is noticeable that the amount to buy socks is only similar value. The most expensive commodity that
sold
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 in the shop is dress pants,
women
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pays
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pay
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 $76.66
while
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men
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pays
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 $71.71. The second most expensive product is jeans
were
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where
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women
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pays
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 10% more than
men
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, $62.75 and $57.09, respectively. Dress shirts
is
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 the third most pricey clothing in the store and
women
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 pays $58.11 which is approximately $6 dollars than
men
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. The jeans price is almost half
than
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 the other expensive commodities,
however
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, it is the product
were
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where
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women
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pays
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pay
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 a lot more than
men
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 which
is
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are
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15% more.
Conversely
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, the only
products
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product
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 that
men
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pays
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pay
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 more than
women
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is
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are
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 underwear,
they
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which
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pays
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pay
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 $10 which is more
that
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than
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 10%
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more than
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than
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of
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women
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. Socks
is
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are
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only
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the only
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 product with no price
different
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difference
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 both
men
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 and
women
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pays
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pay
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 $9.98 each.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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