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Some people view giving presents as an important way to show care to family and friends. Others think there are more important things that can be done to show care and appreciation. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #show #care #friends #appreciation
Sending gifts is essential to prove that
people
 care
with
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for
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 their relatives as the objects represent
the
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love.
However
, others assume it could be shown in
different
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method
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methods
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such
 as spending time together. It is believed that giving presents as a sign to show care for describing
people
 feeling of their close person is important by some individuals, feeling attached
with
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 each other.
That is
 to say, when it comes to the items which
is
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are
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 given
for
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to
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 the
closer
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closest
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 friend,
this
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these
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 must be
a
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special
things
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 for them
receive
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to receive
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it
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, so they would keep that in a proper way since it is memorable.
Nevertheless
, having
a
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 best time
to
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with
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people
who
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whom
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 we care could be done as
another ways
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another way
other ways
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of witnessing
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witnessing
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 our love since it creates well memories for them. Putting more simply, it seems quality time is one of the best
way
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 for
people
occupy
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to occupy
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 their
careness
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careless
, doing many activities Ultimately,
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