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Some people think that robot technology is very important for our future. Others believe that robots are a dangerous invention and have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 the bar chart provides information about the revenue of five different exporting items in 2015 and in 2016, the table depicts the variations of the proportion in five categories from 2015 and 2016. Generally speaking, it is obvious that the export of petroleum
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 earned the most in both 2015 and 2016.
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,textiles increased the most during the period. With regard to export earnings,petroleum
products
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 stood at the highest point in both 2015 and 2016, 60
billion
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 and approximately 61
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 ,respectively.
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,textiles remained at the lowest in both years, roughly 25
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 and approximately 30
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 , respectively.
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,more engineered goods were exported and earned in 2016 than in 2015,
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 there was less income in 2016 than in 2015 for gems and jewellery. Meanwhile, agricultural
products
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 stayed at almost the same number in 2015 and 2016, at approximately 30
billion
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. In terms of the table, when there was a 15.24% increase in textiles, gems and jewellery decreased the most by 5.18%. Meanwhile, there were slight rises in petroleum
products
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 and agricultural
products
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,3% and 0.18%,respectively.
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,the percentage of increase in engineered was 8.5%.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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