The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011.

The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011.
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The bar chart provides information on how many
rentals
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and
sales
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of films per year, divided by four types (
Rentals
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, VHS
sales
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,
DVD
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sales
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, and Blu-ray
sales
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) of a particular shop during the year 2002 to 2011.
Overall
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, the highest revenue from
sales
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and
rentals
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came from
DVD
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over the period,
whereas
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rentals
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which were the second revenue showed a downward trend. The remaining types were not significant and had little changes annually. In 2002, we can see that the number of
rentals
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reached around 185,000 as opposed to nearly 90,000 and just under 50,000 in the
sales
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of VHS and
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DVD
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respectively.
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,
rentals
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experienced a downward trend, which slightly decreased in 2003 and
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continually dropped to just under 60,000 in 2011.
Conversely
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,
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of
DVD
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in 2002 was under 50,000 but represented an upward trend until 2007, which indicated a peak of
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at over 210,000 and it was the highest
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in the graph. After that, there was a gradual decrease until 2011, accounting for around 180,000 and still the most popular among all types in 2011. We can see that VHS was the second most popular of
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in 2002, which comprised approximately 85,000. Interestingly, it disappeared after 2005 and was never shown again. In comparison, the number of Blu-ray
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just started in 2007 but it grew slowly reaching around 65,000 in the year 2011.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rentals, sales, dvd with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Rentals
  • Sales
  • Formats
  • VHS (Video Home System)
  • DVD (Digital Versatile Disc)
  • Blu-ray
  • Peak
  • Decline
  • Rise
  • Market changes
  • Digital downloads
  • Physical formats
  • Over the years
  • Annual
  • Comparison
  • Impact
  • Technological advancements
  • Shift
  • Predictions
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