Air pollution is currently a big issue in most industrialized cities causing respiratory problems and changes in weather patterns. What do you think are the causes of this? What measures can be taken to reduce air pollution?

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industrialized cities face a more pressing environmental
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, particularly
air
pollution. There is no doubt that poor
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the very least, there are two main causes of
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mentioned that transportation is one of the most significant
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air
pollution. At least, it is
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common knowledge that
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generates plenty numbers of CO2 and other
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chemical
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the
air
.
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,
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of
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Indonesia
, almost 20% of the entire carbon emissions in the country
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from that sector.
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, take a vital role
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climate change. 
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the current condition, the more use of vehicles, the poorer
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index will be.
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mitigation actions of
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the worse climate change.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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