You are living in a city in a foreign country, and a friend from your home country is soon coming to visit you for several days. Write an email to your friend, asking him or her to bring some things from home which you need saying why you need them making arrangements to meet Begin your letter ‘Dear --------’

#city #country #friend #home #visit #email #arrangements #‘dear

Dear Anna, It's been

for

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ages that we never meet

since

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two years

a go

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ago

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that

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when

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I came to

visiting

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you in Japan. And it was

wonderful

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a wonderful

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experience

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that I would never forget. Well, now is your turn to come to

visiting

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me, I am so happy that

finally

you have

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time to go

holiday

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on holiday

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, here in Bali and I am sure you'll be happy. Just because you treat me very special when I was there now I will treat you as best as I can. You don't have to worry about the

accomodating

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accommodation

accommodating

because there is a small boutique hotel with

best

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price

just

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of just

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$50 per night and

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already

including

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breakfast, and good facilities,

for

instance

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there is a big swimming pool, spa with

traditional

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massage or you can go to

gym

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before breakfast and it has a beautiful few of the green village. And what is the

lucky

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you because I was remembering that you really want to see the ceremony of Ngaben or the

traditional

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cremation and

also

I'll take you to see the castle of Hindu in Bedugul and the most popular beach in Kuta,

whereas

we can see the eyes of angels,

in other

words

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is the

sun set

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. And please do not

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forgot

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bring a nice Kimono for me that I forgot to purchase. Please let me know your flight schedule so I can pick you up

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the airport and take you to the Hotel.

Furthermore

also

give me your confirmation whether you agree or not to stay in the hotel that I suggest.

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my dear friends I think

that is

all, please do not hesitate to contact me with my phone number below. I can not wait to see you.

Lost

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of love Mia

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
28Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

296 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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