Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples form your own knowledge or experience.

At present we are living in
21st
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century. By
this
year we are facing a lot many
health
problems
.
health
has become a really major sector for concern these days.
Now a days
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people
are having or facing some or
the
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other medical issues or
problems
. The life of humans has become really miserable. We can say
people
in every age group
is
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suffering from different diseases
and
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which are dangerous in their own ways. The increase in
number
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a number
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of
health
problems
has made a human pillar of pathology. Humans are tired of spending money
over
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their doctor consultations and treatments.
People
has
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taken their life very casually as I have seen many of them either ignoring their
health
or symptoms or just
by
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treating themselves
by
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some home remedies or by taking medications. They do not prefer going to
doctor
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the doctor
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for their
problems
for
the
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further
consultations and
advices
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advice
advises
rather
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but rather
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helping
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themselves with the over and excessive use of
drugs
, one
such
drug ; commonly used is
tablet
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paracetamol 500mg.
people
have found an easy way to solve their
problems
with
the
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less and incomplete knowledge about
drugs
and related complications. They think they are smart enough to take care
about
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their
health
without the doctor’s consultation and prescriptions and by conveniently by any of
the
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drugs
from
the
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near by
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nearby
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medical stores. One of the very common
example
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for
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this
is
people
buying tab pcm 500mg very easily and treating their fever, pain, headaches,etc. without asking anyone.
This
drug is being used like
a daily calcium tablets
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daily calcium tablets
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for
people
. Without seeking the future consequences live liver failure and death
due to
over and unnecessary use of
this
drug. We have to stop
people
to save their lives. We must make them aware and educated about the uses and side effects of the medicines and about the importance of taking consultation and
prescription
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prescriptions
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before taking any
drugs
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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