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Some parents believe that watching TV and playing computer games should be limited and substituted by book reading. Do you agree or disagree?

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In today’s world,
parents
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 are debating whether accessing electronic
devices
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 should be limited or not.
children
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 have many possibilities to get high-tech because our century is modernism shaping with technology.
This
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 essay will explain that
children
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 shouldn’t be limited because computers are in daily life and reading books could be on book tablets.
To begin
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 with, people's life routines are changed in the
last
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 two decades with modern
devices
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. Nowadays, the new generation has different technologies for leisure activities and
children
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 could spend their time just hanging out on the internet. Naturally,
parents
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 want to interfere with their sons/daughters because
children
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 couldn’t understand the harmfulness of the computer.
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, many
parents
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 changed their habits about warning methods when they try to say that more hours on the computer directly affect whole body function.
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, physical and mental issues are popular in teenage society as known as elders.
On the other hand
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, limited computers or TVs seems old schools prevention. If
parents
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 aim will help and shape their
children
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's life,
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 they have to be pacemakers and
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 they would like to warn about the harmful side of social and new media.
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, when
parents
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 adopt today’s technology, their son/daughter makes the same attitudes and they could learn to read with reading tablets. Some tech firms are producing child’s tablets which are more educational than normal books.
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,
children
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 are more paying attention
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 they are using modern
devices
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.
To sum up
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,
parents
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 shouldn’t be limited to TV or computer
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 of
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 they should teach how smart
devices
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 are used correctly. When something is restricted by authorities, humanity always is more curious and disobey the rules which are coming from our human being.

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