The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given maps outline the plan
of
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constructing
town
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in a new way. The
town
is totally seen that it will be arranged from industrial to futuristic. The significant change between
previous
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and after is there will have a big road which is directly connected to the
center
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of
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Nutrition
. One another big development we can see
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in the future, all
facatories
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factories
surrounded
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the
center
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of the
town
will be reversed
to
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residences. In the future as
showned
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shown
on a map, like
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a school
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school
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schools
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,
playground
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playgrounds
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,shops and medical
center
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centers
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will be created for the infrastructure of the area.
As a
result
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we can expect that the
town
will put some
efforts
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to make
community
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a community
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for habitats and
welfare
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for
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children
also
.
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points
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of changing
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following the map is making roads to approach
to
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the
center
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from everywhere.
In addition
, there will extra
center
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exist which will be combined with
main
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the main
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central spot of the
town
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, center with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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