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These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties.

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Due to
 an arm and leg, everyone is looking for
better
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a better
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lfestyle
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lifestyle
 and good opportunities in
career
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. As a
consequences
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 of
this
, the major part of the community
migrate
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 to
another countries
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another country
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. Some people opine that there are
plethora
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 of advantages
while
other's
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 believe that it's not easy to live without their family members.
This
 essay will discuss some pros and cons of living abroad. To
began
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 with, there is a huge demand
of
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for
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 skilled trade workers in foreign countries, which are paying
a
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apply
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handsome
pacakges
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packages
package
.
For
this
 reason, there have been plenty of job opportunities available for
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as well as
full time
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 people.
In addition
 to it, another reason
of
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living abroad is mainly for better living standards. Eventually, which provides all the
luxury
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 life which they had imagined in their own city. On the other side,
language
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 barrier is
being
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considered
as
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the major
difficulties
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difficulty
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 faced by
migrates
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migrants
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.
Although
, in their home country, they are fluent and
confidence
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, living outside of their comfort has been
a
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 obstacle for them.
Moreover
, a recent study mentioned that students missed their home, traditional festivals, and culture which turns them to home-sickness. To share one example, international students missed their family and food the most. Having concluded, every coin has two sides,
similarly
, leaving their home city and
settle
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 down in a foreign country is not
every one's
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 cup of tea, but it has excess benefits down the hill.
Intially
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Initially
 the new
immigrates
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immigrants
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had
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missed their parents but gradually after getting a satisfactory job including
better
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a better
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life style
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lifestyle
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 they will be
extreme
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 happy about their decision.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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