In many cities an increasing number of people do not know their neighbours and there is a lack of sense of community. What are the causes of this problem? How can it be solved?
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neighbors
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number of people
people
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children
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encouragement
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brightness
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will have a lot of benefits to
children's future.
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main issues. If we Correct determiner usage
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