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Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep

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These days a lot of
people
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 are having a hard time getting enough sleep . not having enough sleep could contribute to many psychological
problems
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, and to overcome these
problems
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people
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 must treat the cause by visiting a
doctor
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 to get a checkup.  Many
people
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 suffer from not having enough sleep at night and that could lead to affect their minds by having mental
problems
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. sleep is the most important thing for the human body ,
people
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 should sleep at least 8 hours every day to have a healthy body and mind.
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 , a study showed that sleeping less than 8 hours could increase the risk of having
alzahaimers
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Alzheimers
 disease. 
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, to overcome these kinds of
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 the person should go to a
doctor
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 and have a checkup.Seeing a
doctor
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 is the best option to treat the lack of sleep since it's considered to be a disease
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 the doctors can treat it by giving some medications
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 it's better to treat the problem earlier before it affects the mind of the person.For ,example a lot of medications are made to treat
people
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 suffering from insomnia which is the lack of sleep and many
people
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 got treated that way and showed an improvement in their sleeping level. In conclusion,A lot of
people
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 have
problems
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 getting enough sleep and
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 could have a negative impact on their health over
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time to treat the cause
people
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 should go to see a
doctor
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 .  One great suggestion would be that the government should put a campaign where they can increase
society
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 knowledge about the negative effects of having less sleep that would lead to many
people
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 treating their
problems
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 by visiting a
doctor
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.

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