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The plan below show the layout of a university 's sports centre now,and how it will look after redevelopment Simmerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The figures give information about the plan of boosting the blueprint of the sports clubs in a university with details.
Overall
, at one glance,
it is clear that
 some new facilities along expanding area to the larger area are predicted to construct in the development sports centre by maintaining the old construction in the centre of the building. Looking at the details,
firstly
.two dance studios will be located in the northeast of a new building.
Secondly
, they will provide a second changing room next to the prospective cafe in the southeast of the future structure.
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there is a pool in the middle of the existing centre, a leisure pool will be provided in the north-east of the boosted area which will be with a different design and in a larger size.looking at the south-west of the structure a sports shop next to the third changing room are planned to be built.
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