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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some people believe that a loss of biodiversity is the most pressing
enviromental
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environmental
 issue.
While
 others argue that there are more serious problems than that. In
this
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extinction
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 of certain
plants
 and
animals
 can have an impact on our well-being, but more crucially that the danger of global warming is much more important. A loss of various species of fauna and flora can impact the way we live. As
humans
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 we are at the top of the food chain and with
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the extictions
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extictions
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extinctions
extinction
 of some
plants
 and
animals
 we might run out of some options
of
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for
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 consumption. We are not
neccessarly
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necessarily
 at
the
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apply
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risk of worldwide hunger,
nonetheless
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 without some specific
plants
 and
animals
 we can lose crucial nutrition.
For instance
,
decline
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the decline
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 in
number
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a number
the number
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 of tunas is posing a big threat of losing a very nutritionally rich meat. Which can result in
lack
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a lack
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 of essential vitamins that can lead to worse
overall
 health. With
a
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decent progress in artificial food development, global warming seems to be a much more severe issue. Unlike food, our planet has no substitutes - at least in close future.
Hence
, it is of
a
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paramount importance, we take
a
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good care of it.
Otherwise
, we will witness a
further
 increase in
sea
 level
that is
 especially vulnerable to small islands and countries with connection to
sea
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the sea
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.
Such as
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As
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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, which, thanks to
a
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 flat nature of its land, is at a high risk of having part of its area covered by
sea
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the sea
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 in the future. Some locals are already buying properties in other parts of
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 to be
prepeared
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prepared
 to move. In case of a sudden rise
of
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in
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sea
 level. In conclusion, given the dangers of global warming that pose a real threat
on
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to
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 our extinction. I am firmly convinced that more attention should be
payed
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paid
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 to it in
oppose
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 to
a
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the
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 loss of various species of
plants
 and
animals
 that can be replaced.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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