The diagrams below give information about the manufacutre of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams represent the production of frozen
fish
pies. The first diagram shows what a Use synonyms
fish
pie is made of, and the second diagram illustrates its process and production of it.
First of all, a Use synonyms
fish
pie contains peas, sauce, potato and Use synonyms
fish
. It is put in a microwaveable container to be heated. Regarding the other diagram, there are two ingredients that go through the process of making Use synonyms
fish
pies, (potatoes and Use synonyms
salmon
).
In terms of potatoes, the delivery of potatoes can take up to one month. When it is delivered, it is cleaned, peeled, and sliced before being boiled and chilled. After that, it is stored.
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Salmon
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on the other hand
, is delivered in no more than 12 hours. Once delivered, lemon juice and salt are added to the fresh Linking Words
salmon
. After that, is it put into a steam oven. When finished, the skins and bones are removed and thrown into a disposal waste. Later, the salted Use synonyms
salmon
, prepared peas, prepared sauce and potato are all wrapped up to freeze. Use synonyms
Finally
, it is all stored or dispatched.Linking Words
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